Englisch Essay Kinder und Haustiere auf Kaninchen Forum

Hi,

zum Abschluss meines Sprachkurses haben wir die Aufgabe ein Essay zu schreiben, bei dem wir Pro und Contra zu einem Thema diskutieren. Glücklicherweise haben wir freie Themenwahl
Ich habe mir das Thema Kinder und Haustiere gewählt.

Ich bin noch nicht ganz fertig. Bisher habe ich die Pros und die Contras genannt. Sprachlich und auf Fehler sollte der Text sicher auch nochmal geprüft werden, aber darum bitte ich euch nicht. Ich würde einfach gern eure Meinung zu meinen Essay hören. Ist es totaler Quatsch, gibt es Unstimmigkeiten oder gefällt er euch ganz gut. Habt ihr eventuell noch Ergänzungen für mich oder habe ich sogar einen ganz wichtigen Punkt außer Acht gelassen.

Hier ist mein Text:


"A lot of people like to have a pet. Especially children wish often to get an animal for themselves. Many parents know the situation in which their junior stands begging looking in front of them and request for a fluffy companion. Of course it can have also own feathers or dandruff – it doesn’t matter. In the past the parents may also asked their own parents for a pet and in the future their children’s children will possibly do it likewise. Naturally this doesn’t affect to anyone, but the essay will not deal with those who don’t desire a pet. It will exclude assistance animals as well. It will also don’t look at the financial aspects. This is taken for granted. Furthermore the essay will focus on traditional house pets like dogs, cats and primarily different rodents such as rabbit und guinea pig, but this does not mean that it doesn’t apply other pets too. The resultant question is should it be allow to the children to get a pet?

As a matter of course the essay will consider both sides of the issue, the positive as well as the negative aspects. There are many advantages for the humans on keeping a pet. But whether how many benefits caring for a pet entail we should look on the interest of the animals just as well. Which mostly are opposed to the keeping of a pet, but should be respected in the same way. After considering both points of view the essay will summarize, take a conclusion and may find a compromise for the issue.

A lot of scientific publications deal with the psychological aspects coursed by the keeping. A pet can be friend, a comforter and a therapist at the same time. The interaction with pets enhances the social skills of the kids. As a pet owner you create a strong relationship with your animal companion and the pet becomes a high valued family member. Again children are affected the most. Though this attachment with the pet can the kid learn to be more tolerant, gentler and more patient. Pets don’t sham, it shows if you are good to him or not. Thereby the child adapt to a more sociable behaviournot to destroy the trust of his fluffy friend. Introverted or social secluded children are able to benefit from the bonding also in another way. Via caring for an animal they can increase self-confidence, self-esteem and self-reliance. A pet is always there. Moreover the animal is able to sense feelings and emotions. With their mere presence they can make you feel better. Therefore pets especially cats are used for therapeutic purposes. Dogs above all make the child to go off and move around. But there are not only the dogs who can do this. Rabbits and guinea-pigs love and need green fodder. The children have to go out at a meadow to collect grass, herbs and other meadow plants as well as twigs. In this way they can also learn a lot about the different kind of plants. This is in our technologised time a great plus.

As indicated above we must look on the interest of the pet too. Every animal have their own needs of housing condition, feeding and social interaction. Before getting an animal you should always inform yourself about it. In case of a small child have the parent the important duty to inform themselves and teach the child about the requirements. Even with teenagers the parents must also be informed about the pets needs. This should be discussed between the child and the parents. Did they understand all needs and can they fulfill them? Too often you hear from a child who own one rabbit and the parents don’t allow a second one. But rabbits are animals who live in a group which can’t be replace by humans or other animals. They need another rabbit as companion. This should be clear before buying single one. For small children it is hard to understand that they can’t stroke or hold their pet as often as they wish. Rodents have to get slowly use to the petting and nearly all of them don’t want to get pick up. Not all cats are cuddly. Even if they are often moody. The cats decide which time stroking is allowed. Otherwise they may scratch. You must first show and explain to the kid how to interact with the pet. There are duties which must be fulfilled. The child must understand which duties – how long and who often – come up with keeping a pet. A dog want to go out several hours a day more than once. Small child can’t do this alone. And is the teen willing to go out with their/its dog in the morning after a party? In Germany they shorten the schooldays for the matriculation standard by one year. Therefore the students have to learn more which leads to sitting till late afternoon with homework. Are the student willing to spend the free time which remain with the pet? Or even cleaning its manure? Are anyway enough time available? If you can’t fulfill the requirements the pet will suffer and may perish because of it. The most awful scenario is where the child totally lose the interest and the parent reluctant take care or the pet pushed off to the animal shelter. You may don’t like to think about abandon."

Vielen lieben Dank bereits schonmal im vorraus.

Huhu,

Ich finde es ok, jedoch habe ich echt Schwierigkeiten manchmal gehabt, zu verstehen, was Du sagen möchtest.
wenn Du möchtest, kann ich korrekturlesen, da sind einige grammatikalische "Krummheiten" , was das Textverständnis etwas schwer macht

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Alles, was der Mensch den Tieren antut, kommt auf den Mensch zurück.
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Wenn du gerne meine Grammatik korrigiren willst nur zu
Für sowas bin ich immer Dankbar.

Es macht halt nur mehr Arbeit als nur seine Meinung zum Text zu äußeren, daher habe ich es von niemanden erwartet oder drum gebeten.
Wenn du fragen zu einigen Stellen hast frag ruhig. ^^

Hast Du den Text auch auf Deutsch?
Einige Wörter klingen etwas verschroben, es wäre vielleicht einfacher, Du schickst mir den deutschen Text dazu und dann kann ich vergleichen und ändern...

Mache ich gerne, spreche in letzter Zeit viel zu wenig englisch und freue mich über jedes englische Wort...

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Alles, was der Mensch den Tieren antut, kommt auf den Mensch zurück.
Pythagoras

Nein ich hab den Text leider nicht auf Deutsch.
Ich könnte ihn dir auch so auf Englisch zuschicken.

Wie gesagt wenn du Fragen hast frage bitte ^^
Falls es leichter ist kann ich dir auch meine Mail oder Facebook Kontaktdaten geben.
Trotzdem nochmal viele vielen Dank

Ich hab jetzt den letzten Part geschrieben.

Falls ihr den auch noch lesen wollt:

" To summarise, it is established that if children grow up with pets they can develop easier social skills. The keeping brings also a mentally health and balance. But small children are definitely not able to care for a pet on their own. They need guidance and also assistance. Not every animal is suitable for a teen due to the low free time. It is better if the teen can share the duties with someone or take turns. That someone is there in times of stress, like the audit period, who looks after the pets in the same way.
In conclusion this means if the child wishes a pet, this will affect the whole family. Therefore the pet have to be accept and welcome by them. It would be wrong if the Parents only agree to a pet to have their peace and afterwards don’t keep watch over the way how the child treat the animal. Children and Parents should take care together of their new family member. At least until assured that the child is capable to care for the pet on his own."


@ crazy_honeybee: Ich kann dir auch stellen die du nicht verstehst nochmal versuchen auf Deutsch aufzuschreiben.

"A lot of people want a pet. Especially children often wish to get a pet for themselves. A lot of parents know that situation in which their junior stands in front of them with a begging look and asks for a fluffy companion. Of course it can also have feathers or scales ( dandruff ist Schuppen im Haar)– it doesn’t matter. In the past parents may have also asked their own parents for a pet and in the future their children’s children will possibly do the same. Naturally, this doesn’t affect everyone, the essay will not deal with those, who don’t desire a pet. It will exclude assistance animals as well as financial aspects. This is taken for granted( würde ich rauslassen...). Furthermore the essay will focus on traditional pets like dogs, cats and rodents such as rabbits und guinea pigs, but this does not mean that it doesn’t apply other pets too. The resultant question is: should it be allowed to give pets into childrens hands?

The essay will consider both sides of the issue, the positive as well as the negative aspects. People benefit from taking care of a pet, but you need to focus on the Pets needs as well, which often are contradictory to the keeping of a pet, but should be respected in the same way. After considering both points of view, the essay will summarize, draw a conclusion and may find a compromise for the issue.

A lot of scientific publications deal with psychological aspects of animal husbandry. A pet can be a friend, a comforter and a therapist at the same time. The interaction with pets enhances the kids social skills. As a pet owner you create a strong relationship with your animal companion and the pet becomes a highly valued family member. Again, children are affected the most. Through this relationship with the pet, the child learns to be more tolerant, more gentle and more patient. Pets don’t sham, they show you whether you are good to him or not. Thereby the child adapts itself to a more sociable behaviour not to destroy the trust of his fluffy friend. Introverted or socially secluded children are able to benefit from the bonding. By caring for a pet, they can increase self-confidence, self-esteem and self-reliance. A pet is always there for them. Furthermore a pet is able to sense feelings and emotions. With their mere presence they can make you feel better. Therefore pets especially cats are used for therapeutic purposes. Dogs above all make the child get up and move around. But not only dogs can cause this. Rabbits and guinea-pigs love and need green fodder. Children have to go to a meadow to collect grass, herbs and other meadow plants as well as twigs. By doing that, they also learn a lot about different kinds of plants. This is definitely a plus factor in our technologised time.

As indicated above, we must look at the interests of the pet, too. Each pet has its own needs of housing condition, feeding and social interaction. Before buying a pet, you should always inform yourself. In case of a small child, parents are in duty of providing information and teaching the child about those requirements. Even with teenagers, parents should be informed about the pets needs. Parents and Teens should discuss those needs. Have they understood, and are they able to fulfill them? Sadly, you hear of children too often, who own one rabbit and the parents don’t allow a second one . But rabbits are animals who live in groups which can’t be replaced by humans or other animals. They need rabbits as companions. You should be aware of that before buying a single one. For small children it is difficult to understand that they cannot cuddle or hold their pet as often as they wish. Rodents have to get used to the petting slowly and nearly all of them don’t want to get picked up. Not all cats are cuddly. They are often temperamental. Cats decide if stroking is allowed at that time. Otherwise they may scratch. First of all, you have to show and explain the kid how to interact with the pet. There are duties which must be fulfilled. The child needs to understand which duties – how long and how often – come up with keeping a pet. A dog wants to go for a walk several hours, more than once a day. Young children can’t do this by themselves. And you have to ask if the Teen is willing to walk the dog in the morning after a night out. In Germany, they shorten the schooldays till matriculation standard by one year. Therefore the students have to learn more in a shorter amount of time which leads to doing homework till late afternoon. Is the student willing to spend that little spare time remaining with taking care for the pet? Or even cleaning its manure? Is there enough time available at all? If you can’t fulfill those requirements, the pet will suffer and may even perish because of it. The most awful scenario is a child, totally losing interest and parents, taking care of the pet reluctantly or the pet being deported to the animal shelter. I do not want to think of those, who abandon their pet.

Ich habe versucht, alles zu verstehen und es dann so geändert, wie ich es verstanden habe.
Teilweise habe ich Kommentare reingeschrieben, die musst Du dann natürlich löschen...

Ich mache Dir jetzt noch schnell den letzten Teil...

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Alles, was der Mensch den Tieren antut, kommt auf den Mensch zurück.
Pythagoras

" To summarise, it is established that children, growing up with pets can develop social skills more easily. The keeping causes mental health and balance as well. But small children are definitely not able to care for a pet on their own. They need guidance and also assistance. Not all pets are suitable for a teen due to the lack of spare time. For a teen it could be better to share duties with someone or take turns, so that you have someone, who looks after the pets in the same way
in times of stress, like the audit period.
In conclusion this means, if a child wants a pet, it will affect the whole family. Therefore the pet has to be accepted and welcome by them. It would be wrong, if parents only agreed to a pet to have their peace and afterwards would not take care of the way, the child treats the pet. Children and Parents should take care of their new family member together. At least until it is guaranteed, that the child is capable of caring for the pet on his own."

Ich hoffe, es ist recht so...

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Alles, was der Mensch den Tieren antut, kommt auf den Mensch zurück.
Pythagoras

Ach so, und ohne Gewähr, bitte keine 0 Fehler erwarten ;-)

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Alles, was der Mensch den Tieren antut, kommt auf den Mensch zurück.
Pythagoras

Ich kann mich garnicht oft genug bei dir bedanken für die mühe dir du dir gemacht hast.

Ich werde gleich alles nochmal durch gehen.